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Mark - I like it - maybe make "ENTERPRISE HUB" taller- looks too condensed up & down - thicken the outline on the pointing hands - I would also like to see "ENTRY" stretched out a little - a thin rule connecting the corner ornaments would help also- Nice Design - ya gonna do digital?
-------------------- Carl Wood Olive Branch, Ms Posts: 1392 | From: Olive Branch,MS USA | Registered: Nov 1999
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I'd like the whole background in dark green instead of beige, but leave everything else as it is. (except 'entry'- that could be in slime green).
Is it worth enlarging the "P" more & stretching it left too, & pulling the black 'enterprise' panel behind it to protrude a bit on the left?
$0.02 + gst!
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"...there are no limits when you aim for perfection..." Jonathan Livingston Seagull Posts: 7014 | From: Highgrove via Toowoomba, Queensland, Australia | Registered: Dec 2002
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I find the "rear entry front" confusing (I didn't catch the pointing hands in the banners) I "might" try a differnt hand like the type with the hand coming out a sleeve and put the text in the sleeve. Then move them away from each other towards the coners.
To me it reads as either... 1 element (rear entry front) or 3 elments (rear)(entry)(front) not 2 like
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Mark the letters in the main copy look different sizes. IMO you really don't need the hands and if you must use them put the words in the hands and get rid of the ribbons.
-------------------- Randall Campbell Randy's Graphics, 420 Fairfield N. Hamilton Ontario Canada Posts: 2857 | From: Hamilton Ontario Canada | Registered: Jan 2002
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I'm not certain it wouldn't help to not have the foo foo in the corners. Negative space might be better there, to pull the eye back to the center, where the action is.
One rule of thumb, or if it isn't a rule of thumb, it probably should be...not to use two ornate fonts together on a layout. I think that's what Raymond's hinting at.
On the drop shadow for the main copy, you may want to try using that color that you used for the foo foo. The letters won't appear nearly as heavy.
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P.S. Mark, I personally don't like to see scrolls floating in corners without a purpose of some kind- they need to be connected with a fine line from one to the next, right around, to give them the link or purpose. IMHO, that is.
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"...there are no limits when you aim for perfection..." Jonathan Livingston Seagull Posts: 7014 | From: Highgrove via Toowoomba, Queensland, Australia | Registered: Dec 2002
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thanks for the comments, it is interesting what other sign people think. The sign is going on a old meat works factory and they have a market there every weekend with other rooms sectioned of for permanent tennants. Hence the name produce park that is why i have made that the feature word as they want peope to no it as lets go to produce park. The entry part is to be part of the sign as the rear entry is openened during the week and front is on weekends. Mark i thought of doing the sleeve thing but with a reverse panel already on it i thought it would be too much. Ian there is a pin line connecting to the scrolls, I will post final layout with changes thanks again for the imput.
-------------------- Mark Stokes Mark Stokes Signs Mount Barker South Australia Posts: 388 | From: Mount Barker | Registered: Jan 2005
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I know it's the 13 year old in me, but any sign with the phrase "rear entry" on it is gonna crack me up every time. I'd suggest reworking that. I mean it's classier than saying "doggystyle", but it is still a bit out of place.
-------------------- Ryan Long Magic Light Neon Sign Co. Crawfordsville, IN Posts: 132 | From: Crawfordsville, IN | Registered: Jul 2005
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IMO you really don't need the hands and if you must use them put the words in the hands and get rid of the ribbons.
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